9/21/11 Draft 2

     Hi I am Kevin. I am here to tell you why the black mamba is the ultimate animal. The first reason is the size of the black mamba. The second reason is the venom of the black mamba. The third reason the black mamba is the best is its mouth is black.

     As you heard in the first paragraph you will read about size now. It is the biggest venomous snake alive. It was said in the late 1900s that the black mamba can grow up to 14 feet. Once I heard in 2010 of a black mamba growing up to 18 feet. That is why the black mamba is big.

     Now here is the second reason venom. When you get bitten by the black mamba their is no need to worry you will just die instantly. Even if you have anti-venom in your pocket you`re not fast enough for it to work. Last Monday on TV it said it was the most venomous snake. This is why the black mamba`s venom is deadly.

     You should know why they call it the black mamba. Lots of people think the black mamba is called the black mamba because it is black. That is wrong it is called the black mamba because it`s mouth is black. I remember when I was watching TV and I saw a black mamba mouth it was pitch black. You should know that is why the black mamba is called the black mamba.

     Remember you can see another animal you think is the best. It is not even close to as cool the black mamba is.

9/21/11 big writing test

Hi I am Kevin. I am here to tell you about the black mamba.The First reason you will know about the size of the black mamba. The second reason is the venom of the black mamba. The third reason the black mamba is the best is about the black mamba is why they call it the black mamba.
     As you heard in the first paragraph you will read about size now. It is the biggest venomous snake alive. It was said in the late 1900s black mamba can grow up to 14 feet. Once I heard in 2010 of a black mamba growing up to 18 feet. That is why the black mamba is big.
     Now here is the third paragraph venom. When you get bitten by the black mamba their is no need to worry you will just die instantly. Even if you have anti-venom in your pocket your not fast enough for it to work. Last Monday on TV it said it was the most venomous snake is the black mamba. This is why the black mamba is venomous.
     You should know why they call it the black mamba. Lots of people think the black mamba is called the black mamba because it is black. That is wrong it is called the black mamba because its mouth is black. I remember when I was watching TV and I saw a black mamba mouth it was pitch black. You should know that is why the black mamba is called the black mamba.
     Remember you can see another animal you think is the best. It is not even close to as cool the black mamba is.

draft 2

       Cars are fast. They are as fast as a cheetah. Many cars can go from state to state in about 1 hour. Once my dad drove me to Georgia and it took only 3 hours. That is why cars are fast.
     Lots of cars last a long. A usual car can drive for 40 miles without getting any slower. You only need to get gas every about 3 hours. Yesterday my Dad drove me to Louisiana and I did not even need to get any gas. That is why cars last long.
      Cars are safe. Tons of cars have seat belts. Cars have airbags. A while ago my dad came to Alabama and got into a car wreck but he was OK because of the airbag. That is why cars are amazing.

AUTOMOBILE

Cars are fast. They are as fast as a cheetah. They can go from state to state in about 1 hour. Once my dad drove me to Georgia and it took only 3 hours. That is why car are fast.
     Cars last a long. They can drive for 40 miles without getting any slower. You only need to get gas every about 3 hours. Once my Dad drove me to Louisiana and I did not even need to get some gas. That is why cars last long.
      Cars are safe. Cars have seat belts. Cars have airbags. Once my dad came to Alabama and got into a car wreck but he was OK because of the airbag. That is why cars are amazing.

end of lesson

passed it.

draft 2

     "Ive been waiting for you''said a mysterious voice to John. Oh silly me you know nothing right now I will tell you whats going on.
     John is at his sleep over with his friends Will,Zack,and Alex and when he was going to get the popcorn they were gone. ''Where is everybody''John asked himself. He searched everywhere but, he just could not find them but he did not search the attic. He did not because it is pitch black there. ''But I guess I do not have a choice''John said to himself. When he came in the door slammed behind him. He ran to the door with all his might to the to the door to open it again but, it was locked. And now here is where we started.
     ''Ive been waiting for you''said a m mysterious voice to John.
     ''Who are you what do you what do you want from me''asked John.
     ''HELP ME''Said Will.
     ''ME TOO'' begged Zack.
     ''I am going to kill you but, first''said the voice.
     ''You got pranked''said the voice that was really Alex.
     ''What''said John.
     ''We planned this the whole time''said Will.
     ''So how do we get out''asked John.
     ''Oops''said Will.
     ''What did you do''asked Alex.
     ''I dropped the key''said Will.
     ''OK you know how to get out of here''asked John.
     ''No''said Will. ''Ok''said John.
     ''LET ME OUTTA HERE!!!!"

9/7/11

''Ive been waiting for you''said a mysterious voice to John. Oh silly me you know nothing right now I will tell you whats going on. John is at his sleep over with his friends Will,Zack,and Alex. And when he was going to get the popcorn they were gone. ''Where is everybody''John asked himself. He searched everywhere but, he just could not find them but he did not search the attic. He did not because it is pitch black there. ''But I guess I do not have a choice''John said to himself. When he came in the door slammed behind him. He ran to the door with all his might to the to the door to open it again but, it was locked. And now here is where we started. ''Ive been waiting for you''said a m mysterious voice to John. ''Who are you what do you what do you want from me''asked John. ''HELP ME''Said Will. ''ME TOO'' begged Zack. ''I am going to kill you but, first''said the voice. ''You got pranked''said the voice that was really Alex. ''What''said John. ''We planned this the whole time''said Will. ''So how do we get out''asked John. ''Oops''said Will. ''What did you do''asked Alex. ''I dropped the key''said Will. ''Ok you know how to get out of here''asked John. ''No''said Will. ''Ok''said John. ''LET ME OUTTA HERE!!!!!
To anyone who read this, I'm sorry that my younger  self wasted your time.